Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment edit

  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Dr.Strangelove1964. Peer reviewers: AFishInThePercolator, Stereoscope123.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 17:07, 17 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Peer Review edit

First off, I am glad that you have chosen a Canadian filmmaker to give exposure to. Of course giving exposure to all female filmmakers is our concern, but since Alison E. Rose is Canadian it just adds to the significance. Overall, the article is well thought-out and written as well as remaining neutral. The neutrality of any Wikipedia article is necessary and here it is exhibited. The lead of the article gives a good overview of what will be discussed later in the article. However, perhaps the location of Alison E. Rose’s birth is a bit redundant as it is later presented in the “Personal Life” paragraph.

I changed around some of the wording and grammar as well as hyper-linked a few more specific places and people. To do with the structure, instead of stuffing most of the information on the filmmaker in a paragraph titled “Career”, why not present each film in its own separate sub-heading. Also, adding a photo and the biography box would add to the overall structure of a standard Wikipedia article.

Good job!

Peer Review edit

Overall an excellent entry. If you could expand on her educational background that could be helpful; where did she go to school etc. You seem to have expanded on your descriptions of the films since I checked last and that is excellent! I made some minor grammatical and formatting changes, I also linked some Wikipedia pages where possible. If there is any additional information available about her production company that would be great to include as well. Stereoscope123 (talk) 17:26, 3 March 2016 (UTC)Reply