Talk:Afterbirth (American Horror Story)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 22:59, 15 March 2012 (UTC)

Issues: *Intro: This could be expanded a little bit more. It's kind of skin and bones right now *Intro: References aren't need in the intro. Move citation [1] to "Reception and Ratings" *Nine Months Ago: "He shows her pictures of this great house..." Change 'this' to 'a' *Nine Months Ago: "He tells her the price of this house..." Change 'this' to 'the'

• Plot: Watch contractions like 'doesn't' and 'hadn't'

*Production: "ninety-minute one" Change one to 'episode' *Production: I feel that this section can be expanded quite a bit with the citations present right now. Try talking about the house, which I see is mentioned in the E! interview<, etc. *Ratings: Are there any more reviews? It's not a huge deal, but I'd search for a few more.

• Ratings: Explain what a 1.7 rating means
• Ratings: Link ratings

*References: Refs 3-4 don't have Access dates Overall, this needs a bit of work and expanding I feel, which I think is perfectly possible. It's in decent shape right now, but I think needs to be bulked up. Thus, I'll put it on hold for seven days to fix it up. Cheers!--Gen. Quon (talk) 02:44, 16 March 2012 (UTC)

Good! I cleaned up all the loose-ends and bits, and I'm happy to pass.--Gen. Quon (talk) 03:05, 18 March 2012 (UTC)