Talk:Aaron Miller (ice hockey)/GA1

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Lead

• Source for birthday and place born?

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• Change the Quebec Nordiques and when they relocated, the Colorado Avalanche, to the Quebec Nordiques—who eventually relocated and became the Colorado Avalanche,

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• Add information about his personal life here.

Don't quite understand this part. What part of his personal life would you want added here: his family, his early life, his brief post-hockey career, something else?

Prose

• There is no source for him being drafted in the 1989 draft.

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• Miller had a career season in 1998–99. That doesn't make sense.

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• Any number lower than 10 should be written out. For example, the number 4 should be written out as "four"

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• It also marked the NHL playoff debut for Miller, who had a goal and 2 assists in 17 playoff games. The following season, he had 4 points in 55 games for the Avalanche, while going pointless in 7 playoff games. Miller had a career season in 1998–99. After scoring a career-high 18 points in 76 games, Miller participated in 19 playoff games, with a career best 5 assists and 6 points. He would only play in 53 games the next season, but did suit up for every playoff game, scoring a goal and an assist in 17 games. - None of that is sourced.

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• Miller would finish the 2000–01 season with the Kings. In the final 13 games of the regular season, he had 5 assists, finishing with a career-best 14 assists and matching his career high of 18 points in one season. He contributed an assist in 13 playoff games as the Kings played his former team the Avalanche, who defeated Los Angeles as they went on to win the Stanley Cup for the second time. - is not sourced either.

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• "He contributed an assist in 13 playoff games as the Kings played his former team the Avalanche," - change to "He contributed an assist in 13 playoff games as the Kings played the Avalance, Miller's former team."

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• and adding twelve assists - 12 should be written in numbers

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• The 2004–05 NHL lockout cancelled the 2004–05 season and unlike several other players, Miller did not play in a different league. He returned to play for the 2005–06 season and earned eight assists in 56 games. For the first time in his career, Miller played in all 82 games during the 2006–07 season, again scoring eight assists. - unsourced.

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• "returen" - spelling

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• Two years later, he joined the bronze medal-winning American team at the 2004 Men's World Ice Hockey Championships. He contributed an assist in 9 games. Later that year he participated in the 2004 World Cup of Hockey, and appeared in 5 games. Miller made a returen to the World Championships in 2005, playing 7 games and scoring 2 assists. - is all unsourced.

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Career stats

• You need to at least add a general ref that covers this information

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Awards

• Add some prose here. Explain the awards, and source the section.

Added reference, and all are mentioned in the body of the article. This section is more of a quick summary of what he won. Likewise, rather than have them repeated, the references are in the body of the text on the first mention of the award.

References

• Like I noted above, more have to be found. A lot of things are unsourced.

Sourced everything that had an issue

Templates

• Surely there must be some templates that can be added to the External links section?

Don't really see how adding a template will contribute anything to the article.

I'll watchlist this, so any comments here will be seen soon enough. Good luck, iMatthew ^talk at 16:45, 16 August 2009 (UTC)

Finally got a chance to spend some time on the article. Fixed it up, so would appreciate to hear of any other concerns. Kaiser matias (talk) 23:26, 25 August 2009 (UTC)

I thought I had already passed this! Oops, well anyways.. sorry about that! Passed. iMatthew ^talk at 02:49, 6 September 2009 (UTC)