Talk:A Toast to Men/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Cartoon network freak in topic GA Review
GA Review edit
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:31, 10 June 2017 (UTC)
Lead edit
- a song from American singer → I think "by" sounds better here
- you should say here, as well as in the "Background" section that it fatured vocals from Lady Mary
- Link "critics" to music journalism
Infobox edit
- flawless ;)
Background and composition edit
- behind the lyrics, she said → say "confessed" here to avoid word repetition
- and twelve seconds → 12 is above 10, so don't spell it out
Release and promotion edit
- was released as a digital download → replace "as a" with "for"
- The song was promoted → state "the track" here to avoid repeition
- sometime in the mid-2000s → this sounds very weird; if you don't have the exact date, I suggest removing this
- Link "radioplay" to airplay
- of IGN, the record was → "record" is generally only used for albums, so state "recording" here
Reception edit
- and "add[ed[ fuel → syntax error
- You can link the first paragraph with the second one if you like
Formats and track listings edit
- You can remove "Formats and" to keep the section name simple
- EP → Digital EP
Credits and personnel edit
- flawless ;)
Charts edit
- I fixed the table here
Release history edit
- Fixed things here as well
- Unlink formats please
Other stuff edit
Copy-violation edit
- 47.9%; maybe you can reword some things?
Links edit
References edit
- As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
- No dead links! Good job!
Outcome edit
Putting this On hold for 7 days. Great job with the article; Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:34, 10 June 2017 (UTC)
- Thank you for the review. I will make the corrections on Monday if that is okay with you as I have a busy weekend. Aoba47 (talk) 15:57, 10 June 2017 (UTC)
- @Cartoon network freak: Thank you for your review. I believe that I have covered all of the points raised above. Let me know if there is anything else that I can do to improve the article. Thank you again. Aoba47 (talk) 15:43, 12 June 2017 (UTC)
- Passing this; congrats!! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:20, 12 June 2017 (UTC)
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