Talk:24: Redemption/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Malinaccier (talk · contribs) 03:39, 6 December 2011 (UTC)

Overall was well written and satisfies most of the good article requirements. Just address the following problems and I will approve the article. Malinaccier (talk) 03:39, 6 December 2011 (UTC)

• There needs to be consistency as to whether you refer to Jack Bauer as "Jack" or as "Bauer."  Done
• "The film was conceived by the 2007–2008 Writers Guild of America strike, which delayed the seventh season for an entire year, the producers were exploring ways to get back on the air earlier." Does this mean the film was created because of the strike? Can you clarify this? [1]  Done
• "Release and reception" and "Release and viewership"/"Critical reception" are redundant.  Done Fixed.
• "Mary McNamara of The Los Angeles Times praised the film for having Howard Gordon taken to heart the criticism and moral issue regarding..." having Howard Gordon taken to heart is confusing. Fixed, I think. [2]  Done
• Critical reception section needs transitions between paragraphs. Gave it a go [3]  Done
• References 4, 37, 38, 39, and 40 need to be expanded.  Done [4]
• Reference 13 is broken [5] Removed . It looks permanently dead. Could only find the article on LexisNexis. The info isn't overly significant so I've removed the one sentence with the dead citation.
• Reference 29 is broken [6] It's still there, but the information needs to be looked for manually, using the instructions in the reference. I was able to find it. It's timing out for me, so I've updated it with a new reference.
• Lastly, can you please fix your links to redirects within the article?

I will take a look at this again later today when I have more time. Looking good so far! Malinaccier (talk) 13:30, 9 December 2011 (UTC)

I'm passing the article! Well done! Malinaccier (talk) 22:02, 9 December 2011 (UTC)