Wikipedia:Peer review/Roblox/archive1

RobloxEdit

Hello, I'm an editor who's been interested in improving the Roblox article because it's been sitting at a C class for quite a while and this is one of the articles that I've thought needed improvement since even before I made a Wikipedia account a few years ago. It's in a better state than it used to be, but I'd greatly appreciate some suggestions from other editors who might notice some issues that haven't stood out to me yet. Anything from minor fixes to major overhauls and everything in-between helps. Even getting this article from a C to a B (or even just a better quality C if nothing else) is a step in the right direction.

Thanks,  Vanilla  Wizard 💙 16:58, 2 June 2020 (UTC)

@Vanilla Wizard: While you're waiting for someone to claim this peer review, I'd suggest making sure that you don't have repeated-but-ungrouped references. 53 and 54 are both to the same article on Inc. 5000. From a quick scan, though — not a formal peer review — it looks much better than I expected. (I was fearing lists of the games, but you've got prose.) -- Zanimum (talk) 15:14, 11 June 2020 (UTC)

Here are a couple of things:

The lead is too short and doesn't exactly adequately summarize the article. There's nothing about the development cycle, the developers, the business model, someone should be able to summarize Roblox in a few words after reading just the lead.
Under the "reception and revenue" section, there are lists of some popular games - and that's good - but there's nothing about the actual reception of the game as a whole. Quoting some reviews would be helpful for this section.
Comparing the Adopt Me! player count to Mount & Blade II: Bannerlord really doesn't make sense, and most readers don't know what it is. Just saying "680,000 concurrent players" is good enough.
The development section has too many extremely short paragraphs. They should be merged together.
Can something be added describing the community?
Some images - hopefully screenshots - should be added to show what the games look like.
Add somewhere how game developers on Roblox are often crowdfunded to develop their games.

That's all I have for now, and if those are all done, the article should be able to move up to B-class. The most important parts are fixing the lead and reception sections, but fixing anything will do. More to come (maybe, I don't know.) Aven13 14:52, 23 June 2020 (UTC)