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The result was: promoted by Miyagawa (talk) 09:48, 24 May 2015 (UTC)
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Teddy Osei edit
... that Ghana-born musician Teddy Osei was a founder and prominent member of the Afro-pop band Osibisa?
- Reviewed: Lee Ratner
Created by Vanamonde93 (talk). Self-nominated at 21:34, 14 May 2015 (UTC).
Interesting life on good sources, thank you! Hook questions: we don't need musician if we have band, we could say "founded in Ghana". I would prefer this palm-wine quote to Afro-Pop ;) - In other words: you may want to try harder to be more specific and interesting ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 19:15, 19 May 2015 (UTC)
- Hi Gerda, thanks for the review. I'm happy to change the hook to make it better; however, I deliberately avoided the palm-wine quote, because other sources (less reliable, but better known) say other things, and also because the derivation of the band's name is not directly relevant to him. How about ALT1 below? Vanamonde93 (talk) 01:41, 20 May 2015 (UTC)
- ALT1 ... that Teddy Osei, who was born in Ghana, played flute, drums, and saxophone for the Afro-pop band Osibisa, which he helped create?
- Hi Gerda, thanks for the review. I'm happy to change the hook to make it better; however, I deliberately avoided the palm-wine quote, because other sources (less reliable, but better known) say other things, and also because the derivation of the band's name is not directly relevant to him. How about ALT1 below? Vanamonde93 (talk) 01:41, 20 May 2015 (UTC)
- fine,
--Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:22, 21 May 2015 (UTC)
- fine,
