Talk:The Wiggles Pty Ltd/GA1

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Reviewer: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 18:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

• You start two sentences in a row with “they”... is there a way to reword that, avoid the over usage?

Replaced first "they" with "the group".

• “consistently appeared in Business Review Weekly's yearly list of Australia's richest entertainers”: later in the article, you cover their ranking until 2011, when they were still ranking 2nd... did they completely drop off the list in 2012? That's what the past tense is suggesting to me.

Nope, but it did need updating for 2012; done.

Thanks.

Business philosophy

• Perhaps right align Field's business philosophy? I'm just getting an overly large paragraph break in that region.

Did I do what you mean? Or did you want to move the quotebox over to the left?

Sorry, I had actually made these comments in Notepad, pasted them in, then forgot that I was muddling around with the article a bit, and had already changed it. Basically, there was a big gap between paragraphs, and I wasn't sure what was causing it, from the code. It's gone now.

• The photo caption is correct to describe the image before describing his personal importance to the corporation, the two name sentence is meh. Perhaps “Anthony Field:”? Perhaps “Anthony Field in 20XX.”?
• While the sentence “Because they financed...” is grammatically correct to start with a “because”, it's still not the best option. “They also had” would be best as just “they had” Perhaps “Financing every business venture themselves, they had to bear the consequences when their ventures did not succeed.”?

Previous two comments addressed.

Thanks.

Merchandising

• The Wiggles handled their own licensing, “turned it over to others”, and since 2003, had Spin Master handle it. Any indication if the person/people in the middle phase was directly hired by The Wiggles Pty Ltd, or part of a separate firm?

The difficulty was trying to combine Anthony's ideas, who was avoiding naming Spin Master, and the CNN report, who reported it. I think the current version portrays that the group handled their licensing and merchandising until Spin Master took it over in 2003.

Thanks.

• The paragraph beginning to “formally consolidated”... why is that within merchandising? That seems extremely top level, the corporate history. The paragraph is great as it is, but it just doesn't fit where it is now.

Good point, moved to "Business philosophy".

• I'm a little confused about the corporate structure. If I was Channel Seven, who was I making the cheques out to? Each performer individually? Or was there a registered company before the “formal consolidation” in 2005? Perhaps the business term explains this, but it should be obvious to the "lay reader".

Personally, I don't think it's necessary to explain it, since the term is linked. That's why we link terms, so all the readers can look it up if they're interested or have questions. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 16:54, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

Television and DVD production

I'm seeing that the assertion of Dorothy airing in countries where the Wiggles didn't air was directly from a Wiggles' mouth. It isn't true though, as Wiggles, Lights, and (maybe) Wiggle and Learn have all aired in Canada, but I've also seen Dorothy on our local kids channels. Also, you make the assertion that these are separate television series, whereas List of The Wiggles episodes claims it's just different titles for different seasons.

Yah, Anthony said it, but it was in his book, which was published a year ago and his information may be out of date. To be safe, I just removed the phrase about Dorothy airing in other countries. I'm a little confused; I'd say the opposite is the case. This article states that the above titles are seasons, and the list asserts that they're separate series. I think that comes from the misunderstanding that Aussie TV is like British TV in that different years of the same show are called "series". Aussie TV is like American TV, in that different years are called "seasons", even if they have different titles. Although I wrote part of the list (the intro, anyway), I wouldn't trust it, since it's a mess and needs some attention. (Maybe from me, at a later time.) Another part of the confusion is that some seasons were produced privately, and others (later seasons) were produced by and aired on the ABC. I believe that this article is accurate.

Other ventures

"The Wiggles also closed three of their play centres in Sydney and Dallas, Texas.": I'm not seeing these play centre mentioned in the article, before the closures. Is there any more information on this venture? How many play centres do/did they have total?

I updated information about the centres; hope it's enough.

You talk about Field leaving the business and the group in 2006, but you don't mention the hiring of new “front line employees”, so to speak. In most multimillion businesses, employee changes aren't earth shattering. In this business, it is very important to their prospects. You've maintained a careful balance of not straying off and talking about the group's productions too much, but I do think this is somewhat relevant, especially considering the insular nature of the group originally.

You're right, of course. I went ahead and updated this part.

That seems to be most of it; note I've made some edits already to smaller things. Looking forward to your response. -- Zanimum (talk) 18:56, 27 February 2013 (UTC)

Thanks, appreciate it. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 22:31, 1 March 2013 (UTC)

• Comment: It's been over three weeks since the most recent edits to this page. Will the review be finished soon? Does a new reviewer need to be found? BlueMoonset (talk) 01:45, 25 March 2013 (UTC)

All the issues have been addressed, and since the reviewer disappeared there must be no more issues, so passing. Wizardman 14:43, 5 April 2013 (UTC)