Talk:The Silent Cartographer

Merge discussion

Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Video games#The Silent Cartographer czar 04:45, 25 March 2018 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:The Silent Cartographer/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: IceWelder (talk · contribs) 20:34, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

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Infobox

• Use "Bungie", the common name, instead of "Bungie Studios".

Lead

• Unlink "video game" for MOS:SEAOFBLUE.
• I don't think you need to mention or cite PC Gamer up here. The body serves this just fine.
• "... of the development of Halo itself, ..." - "itself" is redundant here.

Level content

• Consider merging the second and third paragraphs.

Development

• "... when developers at Bungie moved to Seattle after Microsoft ..." - It appears that Bungie as a whole was moved there, not just individuals.
• Also. wiki-link Microsoft.
• Instead of "an RTS", write out "a real-time strategy game", as this is the first mention of the genre.
• "wide open spaces" should "wide-open spaces" or "wide, open spaces".
• Remove the comma in "drive, led".
• "... as a test map to test aspects ..." - "test" is duplicated here; I think you can just leave out "as a test map".
• In the quote, use emdash (—), as seen in the source, instead of the current hyphen.

Reception

• Kotaku, PC Gamer, etc. should be italicized.
• There is an error in Burford's long quote, it should be "constant sense that you're making progress as you play through the level".
• There is an error in Dale's long quote, it should be "offering the kind of freeform, tactical warfare that fans could only have dreamed about at the time".
• Move the full-stop (and in one case, comma) after the quote per MOS:LQ. This applies to all cases in this section except for that ending in "That's peak Halo for me, really.".
• Restore the Oxford comma in Whittaker's quote at "... sections and a blend of ...".
• Is there a reason Andy Kelly is referred to as "Andy K."?
• In the last sentence, remove the quotation marks from the level name to align it with the rest of the article.

Legacy

• When talking about the film, link to the respective section on the Halo franchise article.
• IGN should be italicized.
• Should "spiritual successor" be in quotes? Either way, consider wiki-linking it.
• In the last sentence, "the level" is ambiguous, since the preceding paragraph mentioned three different levels.

Other

• Add Rich Stanton as the author for ref #4.
• For ref #14, include the page number (44).
• A pet peeve of mine: Please order the categories alphabetically.
• The level is mentioned on Halo: Combat Evolved. Consider linking it from there.

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• @Zxcvbnm: Nice work so far. I left notes for improvement above and am putting the review  On hold for now. Regards, IceWelder [✉] 20:34, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

• @IceWelder: Thanks for taking it up so fast, I have made tweaks to the article that should address all of the concerns raised. I don't have any particular arguments with any of them, they were all errors I made whether unknowingly or accidentally._{ZXCVBNM (TALK)} 21:05, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

• @Zxcvbnm: Good job. I did a last few cosmetic fixes and archived the sources (then redid the fixed because IABot reverted my changes).  Passed. Regards, IceWelder [✉] 21:35, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

• @IceWelder: Thanks so much for the quick, thorough review. That is excellent news._{ZXCVBNM (TALK)} 23:00, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

add photo from halo combat evolved?

Perhaps either in addition to or instead of the screenshot from the anniversery remake, the article should have a photo from the original game. i think this would be especially pertinent since much of this article is discussing the revolutionary nature of the level at the time, and thus a contemporary visual would be a good reference. Ivannilych (talk) 18:33, 7 February 2024 (UTC)

Fair use guidelines say that use of images should be kept to a minimum, and the level doesn't look different enough in the original to merit having 2 images of the same thing. I decided to add the more modern incarnation of the level, as it is more detailed, and I don't think that the level's graphics, while praised, had anything to do with how revolutionary it was. ᴢxᴄᴠʙɴᴍ (ᴛ) 19:19, 7 February 2024 (UTC)