Talk:The King of Fighters '97/GA1
Latest comment: 10 days ago by TeenAngels1234 in topic GA Review
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Nominator: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 00:17, 12 January 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 19:11, 21 January 2025 (UTC)
I'm gonna review this. Stay tuned.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 19:11, 21 January 2025 (UTC)
- "Which is the fourth game in The King of Fighters (KOF) series”. I would not write this sentence among commas. Maybe something like “…platform and its AES home console. It is the fourth game in..” is better.
- Reworded
- “andthe final boss Orochi”. And the.
- Done
- Maybe too many passive forms in the lead and possibly in the article. Too many “was”, “were” etc.
- Revised
- In the Gameplay section I see a consecution temporum problem. Sometimes you used the present, sometimes the future. Keep just one, possibly the present.
- Done
- “the protagonist Kyo Kusanagi was inspired by Japanese myths, especially a move titled "Orochinagi". I can’t understand the link between these two sentences. Why especially a move? Is that a Kyo’s move or something?
- Revised. Kusanagi is taken from the Kusanagi sword that Susano obtained after killing the Yamata no Orochi in myths. The Orochinagi can literally be translated to "Reverse Method 108: Great Serpent Mower" as that was basically how Kyo was originally created.
- Now, Production. “moves,and”. Add space.
- Done
- “SNK carefully chose a voice actor the character, who speaks in the Sacred Treasures Team's ending”. You mean a voice actress for the character? Can you also explain the last part?
- Expanded
- “Kyo's original projectile version was added as an alternative playable version because he was popular with gamers. There was an objective to give players a large number of combos. The game uses two fighting systems.[11] There were two weeks of balances for the game.”. This looks confusing. A lot of brief sentences with no link. Is this necessary? What do you mean with “combos”? And “two weeks of balances”?
- Explained
- “the ancient Orochi was a giant snake”. Quite obvious. We can cut it.
- Done
- “Yamazaki was too different from his Fatal Fury persona after Tanabe got the producer's permission” . What do you mean with “too different”?
- Done
- Is the last part of the section necessary? If you want to keep it, maybe Reception is a more appropriate section.
- Done.
@Tintor2: That's all.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 11:39, 27 January 2025 (UTC) @TeenAngels1234: Done. Thanks for the review.Tintor2 (talk) 14:26, 27 January 2025 (UTC)