Talk:Prost–Senna rivalry

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Jeisonlucio in topic Clumsy writing

Clumsy writing edit

From my foreign (french) standpoint, the writing in this article seems egregiously clumsy, but I don't feel confident enough on the subject to attempt to improve it. Examples : "It was this point that the rivalry started, with Senna narrowly won the 1988 championship from Prost." "Prost, unlike any other driver was able to face a setback in the eye and turn into something as great as a race win." "With Prost's career coming to close in 1993 season, the stage was set for Senna to stake his claim as the true greatest. However, as often is the case with such a dangerous and unforgiving sport such as Formula 1, Senna was cruelly denied the opportunity to grace his skill into the future." --Abolibibelot (talk) 21:41, 4 July 2020 (UTC)Reply


I Agree with Abolibibelot. As a brazilian, paragraphs like this one have absolutely no reliability and seems like it's written from the author's own subjective POV: "However, as often is the case with such a dangerous and unforgiving (sic) sport such as Formula 1, Senna was cruelly (sic) denied the opportunity to grace (sic) his skill into the future". We should cut the emotions out as any good encyclopedic article requires. Also, although the relationship Senna-Prost improved after 1994, one citation from Senna is just not enough. This article is badly written and deserves a complete overhaul. Jeisonlucio (talk) 21:40, 28 September 2020 (UTC)Reply