Talk:Mehdi Khalil/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:52, 2 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Taking this review for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 19:52, 2 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead edit

  • "indeed, he was the fifth tallest goalkeeper at the 2019 AFC Asian Cup." - don't think this should be in the lead
  • "first at Koping FF and then at Djurgården." - first playing at Köping FF before transferring to Djurgårdens.

Early life edit

  • "Khalil started playing five-a-side football," - Djurgården Fotboll says it was six-a-side football not five-a-side
  • "at age 12 Khalil started playing five-a-side football, popular in Sierra Leone," - Khalil began playing six-a-side football, a popular form of football in Sierra Leone, at age 12 at Young Sportsmen Club as a defender.
  • "He switched to football at age 15, moving to Johansen." - At age 15, he moved to Johansen to switch to Johansen to play football.

2009–2012: Sierra Leone and Sweden edit

  • "Khalil was nominated best goalkeeper" - named
  • "he made his debut for the club's under-21 side in the U21 Allsvenskan [sv] against Brage, helping his side win 5–1." - repetition of "side"

2013–2017: Safa edit

  • "However, Safa still won the encounter 3–2 thanks to a 92nd-minute" - through a 92nd-minute
  • "In 2015–16," - In the 2015-16 season,
  • "Khalil played 16 league games[7] helping Safa win" - a comma is mssing between "games" and "helping"
  • "Following his contract's expiry in summer 2016," - Following the expiration of his contract in mid-2016
  • "He remained with Safa one further year," - with Safa for one

2017–2020: Ahed edit

  • "Khalil moved to Lebanese champions" - championship club
    • I meant to highlight the fact that Ahed were the title holders on the league. I've changed it to Khalil moved to Lebanese Premier League holders. Nehme1499 (talk) 16:34, 3 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

2020–present: Zob Ahan edit

International career edit

  • "He was part of the squad that played in the 2018 FIFA World Cup qualification between 2015 and 2016" - qualification stage
    • Changed to qualifiers
  • "initially Abbas Hassan's reserve for the first three games, Khalil became Lebanon's first-choice goalkeeper in the final five games" - repetition of "games"
  • "gained access to" - qualified them for
  • "However, the three points were not enough to qualify Lebanon to the" - for the

Style of play edit

  • "and a big physical presence." - large
  • "Indeed, at 1.96 m tall," - the Template:Convert template is needed for the text in bold
  • The word "indeed" in the above sentence is not needed

Honours edit

  • The club portion of the honours section needs to be fully referenced

References edit

  • All of the references that state the author should be included
  • All of the sources that are written in a language other than English should be clearly indicated
    •   Done. I've also added script titles for Arabic titles, and translated titles for non-English titles. Nehme1499 (talk) 17:46, 3 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 10:55, 3 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

@MWright96: I should have taken care of everything. Nehme1499 (talk) 17:46, 3 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
@Nehme1499: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:10, 3 October 2020 (UTC)Reply