Talk:Hal Peck

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Harrias in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Hal Peck/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 10:02, 1 July 2020 (UTC)Reply


I'll take a look at this one shortly. Harrias talk 10:02, 1 July 2020 (UTC)Reply

References edit

  • I get an "Error 404 Not Found" for refs #2, #6 and #13. (It doesn't really matter as full citation details are given, we can treat it as an offline source. Neither of these papers seem to be on Google Newspapers anymore; worth a check to see if they have moved to Newspapers.com; a link would be good if we can get it. Otherwise, just remove the url.)
  • {{open access}} is deprecated for citation templates now.
  • Ref #11 included a publisher, but no other newspaper sources (including ref #10 for the same paper) do.
  • Ref #21 doesn't need an access date.
  • His date of birth and date of death, which are included in the lead and the infobox needs to be included in the prose with a reference.
  • That he batted and threw left-handed is not referenced.
  • The date of his last MLB appearance is not referenced.
  • His career stats are not referenced.
  • The fact that he was a "World Series champion" is not mentioned in the prose.

Image edit

  • Image is appropriately licensed.
  • Alt text would be nice, but is not a GA requirement.

Prose edit

  • What does "everyday player" mean?
  • What is a "fly ball"?
  • "with the catch being" Avoid noun plus -ing.
  • "noted as "one of the greatest catches even seen in Columbus." By who? Provide inline attribution.
  • "shooting his foor" Typo.
  • Either explain, or provide a link, so the reader knows what a "6–2 record" is.
  • "though he did not record an at bat." What does this mean?

That's it from me. Harrias talk 08:43, 6 July 2020 (UTC)Reply

I'll start working on it. For the open access template, what should I use in place of that? The deprecation is news to me, no idea something changed on that front. Wizardman 15:50, 7 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
Nothing; it is just assumed that links are free to access unless otherwise noted: only non-free sources need marking. Harrias talk 16:12, 7 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
Issues now fixed. I wasn't sure how to reword the everyday player since i was using the literal definition, so i just moved the games played up from further down since it gets the point across. Wizardman 23:07, 8 July 2020 (UTC)Reply
Yeah, that makes more sense now. Nice work on this, I'm happy that it meets the GA criteria now. Harrias talk 08:54, 13 July 2020 (UTC)Reply