Talk:Gender inequality in China
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Worked on improving syntax throughout the article. Made several structural changes to paragraphs in order to do so in addition to adding supporting evidence (see Reforms and Labor Market section). Jacquebend (talk) 00:17, 24 October 2016 (UTC)
While improving syntax, I have come across many sentences that were extremely unclear. I have attempted to reference the sources cited to derive the intended meaning, but since many of these sources were in Chinese I was unable to verify the intended meaning of all the edited sentences. In particular, the FDI section was very unclear. While changing grammar, I also discovered large portions of directly plagiarized material. This material has been removed and summaries of the author's findings have been substituted.Jacquebend (talk) 23:07, 26 October 2016 (UTC)
Further, in the unemployment section there were many percentages that failed to add up to 100 (when the percentage of men and the percentage of women should account for all individuals--especially considering the study was from 1990 and intersex individuals were likely not accounted for at this time). I have removed these statistics and instead substituted general conclusions from the cited source.Jacquebend (talk) 23:47, 26 October 2016 (UTC)
I have started editing some sentences to have a better flow and to make more sense to english speakers. I will continue to do this throughout the article. Vsterlingh (talk) 14:27, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
Feedback: reference list, table, EnglishEdit
The article is improving and getting ready to be posted on Wikipedia. I have some suggestions on the Intro paragraph, which I will edit directly. At the end of the article, you notice in red a correction request on the references. You need to add the Reference list (as shown). Check the help link. Also, if you don't put in the syntax for the table, the stats in the table are all in one paragraph. So, either summarize that table in a few sentences on the highest vs lowest stats and any other striking piece of information, or put in a table. Diksha and Corina have put in tables and you can simply copy how they've done it (go to the edit page of the article and copy the table). Also, it would be good if you can improve the English in the article (for grammar, spelling), it is important to improve readability. BerikG (talk) 19:08, 8 December 2012 (UTC)
This is a good article which covers most of the necessary topics. There are some typos needed to be correct as well as the in-text citation format. I am not quite sure how Table 2 relates to the topic of gender inequality in China and think that if you want to keep this table you will have to explain a little bit more. The references are not yet alphabetically ascending and should also be adjusted. It would be nice if you can provide a more current data on some part e.g. the wage gap. There are still some parts of the article needed to be cited by references. For example, the context below Table 1, it seems like the explanations are the author's personal opinion (the content contains words like "maybe") which should be avoided. Unless, this is follows the existing theory or being presented elsewhere (which will again need a citation). If the article contains some picture would improve the quality of this page even better. Econkc (talk) 06:36, 9 December 2012 (UTC)
Note on second tableEdit
I have removed the second table (changes in FDI investment) since the origin of the data was not cited and the data failed to include a gender component (only overall changes in FDI employment).Jacquebend (talk) 23:07, 26 October 2016 (UTC)
This article has improved a lot from its first version! I have only a few suggestions, which might think over:
- In section 3 you write "Research on China's economic reforms also suggests that the cost of restructuring has fallen upon women disproportionately." The sentence implies that all or most research on the subject reach similar conclusions, however from the citations it appears that you offer only one source. To make it more objective I believe you should mention that it is Summerfield's research that offers the respective evidence and not generally "research on China's economic reforms".
- What do you mean by "women have a lower level of occupation"? (section 3, where you enumerate characteristics of Chinese labor market discrimination) do you mean that they had lower rates of employments? Or that there was occupational segregation which disadvantaged women? I think you should rethink such formulation.
- In subsection 2 of section 3 - Occupational segregation - it would be great if you could offer some data on which you base your conclusions.
- Your tables lack their sources.
- it would be great if you could add more recent data and not only till 1995 for Table 1.
1) Please give an example of "explicit discrimination." 2) Also you say the government owned enterprises are exempt from equal employment policies. Please elaborate on this. How is this possible? What % of enterprises do these constitute? Where do the laws apply then? Is there any information on how well the laws are implemented? 3) In reporting employment in foreign-owned enterprises you report "1250 ten thousands"; can you report these in millions? 4) Also, the % of foreign in total employment makes more sense than these absolute numbers. 5) The English grammar problems persist. Could you ask a native English speaker friend to help edit your contribution? That would be very helpful. BerikG (talk) 06:32, 15 December 2012 (UTC)
Gender inequality in China is a very good Wikipedia paper according to Wikipedia critique standards. Its first paragraph offers a useful and clear overview of the topics covered and what you can expect to get out of it. The whole paper focuses on a clear topic which is Gender inequality in China’s labor market. The paper considers 18 references and offers detailed and scholarly support to all of its claims. The paper is fairly readable, and its points are presented in a way that is clear and informational as well as very neutral for the reader. Overall the paper is clear, easy to digest and evenhanded.
At the moment, this article only talks about gender inequality since the foundation of the PRC in 1949. It should either make this explicit, or have a discussion about historical inequality, in the RoC or in imperial times. --jftsang 14:47, 9 November 2015 (UTC)
Foreign direct investmentEdit
I have attempted to revise this section to make it more clear, but it still doesn't relate well to the topic. The research I have done has shown inconsistent trends involving FDI and gender equality, so the findings are not particularly relevant to this article. I think this section should either be removed or further revised to incorporate with a more relevant section.Jacquebend (talk) 02:45, 21 November 2016 (UTC)
I have added sections on the influence of marriage and delaying marriage on gender equality in China. Still working on building more sources to support--feel free to add. Jacquebend (talk) 01:47, 24 October 2016 (UTC)
Notes and ReferencesEdit
The citation system used previously in this article is not correct. I will be working to correct the citations and consolidate the notes and references section. Vsterlingh (talk) 14:29, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
Worked to correct the citation formatting. There were some issues with the translation of article titles and journal names from Chinese to English that I was unable to fix (due to lack of access to these Chinese journals). Jacquebend (talk) 01:58, 26 October 2016 (UTC)
Did Copy Editing and Added a Section on One-Child PolicyEdit
Rearranged some sections, move Confucianism to its own section for example since it was a singular thought. Also added a bit about Gender Disparity as a result of China's One-Child Policy. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Wickersong (talk • contribs) 04:23, 14 September 2018 (UTC)