Talk:Army Service Forces/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 17:43, 11 October 2021 (UTC)

• "The Northwest Service Command, in September 1942." - sentence fragment

  Y Added missing word. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• "ports of embarakation" - extra a in embarkation

  Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• Lutes is lined twice in the staff divisions section

  Y removed duplicate links. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• The position of Director of Administration did not work out, and it was abolished in November 1943 - this appears to be the first mention of this exact title; it likely needs a little more explanation

  Y Re-worded. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• "and Major General Dawson Olmstead was relieved by Somervell on 30 June 1943 and replaced by Major General Harry C. Ingles, a West Point classmate" - the others you specifically state the position held, but not for this one. Recommend doing so

  Y Added. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• " Roosevelt had nominated Major General James H. Burns," - wrong link for Burns

  Y Unlinked. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• "The principle was that they were customer was always right," - something is off here

  Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• Is there a map of the service area boundaries that matches those present in the wartime boundaries? Colorado, Arkansas, and Louisiana vary between the 1921 map and the wartime table

  Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• "The program ultimatyely - c/e

  Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• Was gonna make this change myself, but wanted to make sure first - are the three references to Marshal typos for Marshall?

  Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• Sources are all reliable and formatted well
• "File:Harry C. Ingles.JPG" - date of 2012 is obviously not accurate for the original work; needs a more specific source than just the War Department if possible

  Y Changed date. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

• "File:CairoConferenceParticipants.jpg" - source link is dead

  Y Added archive link. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

That's all from me for GA, placing on hold. Hog Farm _Talk 04:52, 12 October 2021 (UTC)