Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Cretan War (205–200 BC)/Archive 1

Cretan War edit

A-class article before reviews began and I am wondering if it still is. Kyriakos 02:20, 13 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Support Although I would prefer that each citation have a unique number, rather than several citations having the same number, and the different references ebing distinguished by a letter within the footnote. Carom 02:59, 13 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the support. I fixed the problem. Kyriakos 03:34, 13 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

~~Support~~ Oppose Would like some more relvant images and the layout at the end needs sorting Notes: References: See Also: External links. Section named 'Conclusion' I think should be renamed to 'Aftermath'.

After having read it, Dryzen is right about the grammar and general poor writing: eg:

"The First Macedonian War had just ended with the Treaty of Phoenice and the Romans were busy with Carthage and Hannibal, that is when Philip saw his chance to take control of the Greek world, which was his greatest ambition and he knew that his ambitions would be aided by an alliance with Crete."

”The main cause of this treaty was to capture all the land held by the Ptolemaic Egypt and their young Pharaoh Ptolemy V which were not in Africa”

”Attalus was separated from the rest of the fleet and was chased by Philip but when he made it to the mainland he left all the treasure on his treasury ship so the Macedonians would not chase after him but instead would stop to gather the loot and Philip towed off the Attulas' ship thinking that Attalus was dead but in the meanwhile Attalus escaped to Erythrae.”

There’s plenty more poor typo, grammar and bad writing examples. Raymond Palmer 16:09, 13 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]

oppose found some rudemantary grammatical and syntaxic errors that would need ot be fixed to be up to textual quality. I have some questions on the Abydos Suicide. Akin to the first comment the content is up-to par but its delivery needs some work (mostly the Asia Minor section and the treaty with Antiochus the great).--Dryzen 15:15, 13 September 2006 (UTC)[reply]