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No source, no description, no other information easily accessible found elsewhere. Suggest to delete? Antiquetwerp (talk) 20:53, 21 September 2022 (UTC)

Copy editing notes

I have been copy editing this article as part of the GOCE November drive as requested by The Cadillac Ranger. Here are my notes, in no particular order. Of course, these are all just my personal opinion.

• See WP:CITYSTRUCT
• The indigenous village
  • Be more specific, if possible. What culture or people group?
  • There is basically no information for the area pre-Dutch settlers
• In general, this article is very far from being a so-called good article. I'm not a GA reviewer, but I see some blatant sourcing issues (which may well be easily solved). For example, there are several entirely unsourced paragraphs. Sourcing issues are especially egregious in the neighborhoods section. Where there is sourcing, many of the sources are less-than-ideal (blogs, interviews, outdated, real estate advertisement).
• The section pertaining to (de)segregation needs expansion and updating
• Economy section needs expansion
• Demographics needs expansion (i.e., culture, religion, gentrification)
• 21st century history needs more of a narrative (see also WP:PROSELINE) – this is generally true of the history section but especially notable here
• I think a GOCE copy edit (for the purposes of GAN) was an early step here. I would recommend looking at the criteria and starting with criterion #2. In going section-by-section and verifying statements, hopefully criterion #3 will also be addressed as sources/information are found. Then, criterion #1 can be re-addressed by the GOCE, if needed. If this is your first experience with a GAN, also consider going through the peer review process first.
• The lead refers to information not covered in the main body. See MOS:LEADNOTUNIQUE, and more broadly, MOS:LEAD and WP:WBA
• It's possible that this article can just be called Yonkers. See WP:PRIMARYREDIRECT
• See inline notes I left

Feel free to reach out with any issues or questions.

Thanks, Wracking ^talk! 22:07, 19 November 2023 (UTC)

Thank you for the suggestions and the copyedit. As far as it being a GAN, although I mention it as a potential GAN, I am aware that it's way too early for a GAN and it has a long way to go before being a GAN, let alone a GA. I don't consider it GA ready either. However, a copyedit was a great start and I appreciate it. The Cadillac Ranger (talk) 03:22, 20 November 2023 (UTC)