Talk:State Shinto

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Owlsmcgee in topic GA Review

Not overlooked at all edit

In teh end, the article writes:"However in practice this is sometimes overlooked".In fact, anyone in japanese royal family is looking for a return for State Shinto again.In 1945, Japanese emperor Hirohito exchanged impunity for colaboration with the Americans.And among this exchange, was the end of State Shinto and the peclament of the emperor as a constituinal king,such as in England not a living god. Agre22 (talk) 15:03, 29 May 2009 (UTC)agre22Reply

The term "State Shinto" edit

Please take a look at Talk:Separation of church and state#Japan. Wtmitchell (talk) (earlier Boracay Bill) 22:18, 14 April 2015 (UTC)Reply

Npov edit

Pro Shinto, anti-American, as it stands.

Agreed. I'd been working on this for a while, and decided to share what I had after seeing your comment. I hope the current form presents a more balanced overview. Owlsmcgee (talk) 06:28, 9 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

GA fail edit

Just removed the previous GA fail from the Talk banners to avoid bannercreep. The notes are here and are noted in a link on the GA review request. --Owlsmcgee (talk) 18:31, 27 February 2016 (UTC)Reply

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:State Shinto/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:22, 9 June 2016 (UTC)Reply


Hi! I will be reviewing this in the next few days. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:22, 9 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

Fairly well-written, no copyvio detected, no dablinks, comments in the previous review have been addressed. The following are my comments. I would ping Midnightblueowl, the previous reviewer, to know what she thinks of the article now. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 10:37, 11 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

Origins of the term
  • spirit-worship, which dates back No comma needed here
  • dates back to the sixth century Add AD/BC when you begin with the article
  • during the Meiji era Would be helpful to add in a (x–y) format the years of the Meiji era, for those of us who don't know.
Definitions
  • Though some scholars It would be helpful to name a few. This may appear vague to some as it is.
  • "State Shinto" was not an official designation for any practice or belief in Imperial Japan, but describes a mixture Sudden change from past to present tense?
  • though conservative scholars It would be helpful to name a few
  • The "Meiji period" link is a duplicate (it was linked only a section ago)
State control of shrines
  • Shinto priests, even when...Shrine board in 1940. Source?
  • I think the first and second paras can be merged. The first line is, I understand, a summary of the section, but may appear unsourced at first. Better put an example immediately after it.
  • Up to that point, individual priests I think this link should be placed at first mention of "priest". I am not sure if you are referring to a specific type of priests, though.
  • which some scholars suggest is evidence Naming a few can reduce vagueness
Ideological origins
  • The lack of enthusiasm among the population has been attributed to Attributed to by whom?
  • Who is Fukuzawa Yukichi?
  • ideological threat to the Meiji-era government "Meiji era", for consistency
  • Shinto rituals were a civic responsibility Why is "rituals" in italics?
  • and lead to a sharp decline in both state grants I think it is "led", not "lead"
  • it was suggested that to die in battle was a high honor Suggested by whom? Or was this a popular belief?
Post-war
  • Scholars suggest this was a concession from Name a few scholars

That is all I have to say for now. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 10:46, 11 June 2016 (UTC)Reply

Thanks so much for this thorough review! I've tackled all of your recommended changes. --Owlsmcgee (talk) 19:20, 11 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
Great. I assume Midnightblueowl has nothing more to say, so I promote this. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:50, 14 June 2016 (UTC)Reply
Great, my first ever GA! Thanks for taking the time to evaluate it. --Owlsmcgee (talk) 03:48, 15 June 2016 (UTC)Reply